In this blog post, I will go over my peer review for Michaela Harrington
For this final peer review, I peer reviewed Michaela Harrington with her project being seen here. For Michaela's project, I made a copy-editing suggestion, specifically how she could use different phrasing in order to enhance her project. I believe that I was able to help Michaela through my peer review of her project because I believe that her ideas are very strong, however there are certain sentences that she uses which change the tone of formality that might take away from her credibility. I believe that if she were to rephrase some of her sentences, the audience would be able to look at her as a more credible source.
I used Professor Bottai's suggestion in class regarding the difficulty of writing a standard college essay for this final reflection project. Ultimately, the way to make this project successful for this genre convention is to be able to have the right tone where formality is maintained throughout this reflection. I admired her ability to allow her ideas flow so naturally from one to the next, it has a very good flow and I hope to have that in my project and in works moving forward.
Thursday, May 5, 2016
Editorial Report 2
In this blog post, I am going to go over another segment from my rough draft and compare it to my final draft.
Selection from Rough Cut
My writing process throughout the semester has undergone true trial by fire due to the projects that took place during this semester. I have grown in almost all areas of my process, and even if I have not grown I have become more self-aware of myself as a writer. My character as a writer has changed as I have become more self-aware and I have become able to critically analyze my own work at a much higher level, rather than remaining satisfied with the basic and bare minimum for any work that I produce. I have begun to grow and become a much stronger and a more capable writer due to my own work ethic throughout the projects. I did every single assignment that was asked of me this semester and always made time for this class and the goals that I needed to accomplish in order to complete the projects in a timely manner. There are other aspects that I have struggled with due to the amount of work going on all at once in this semester, however this is something that I am going to take moving forward. There are certain amounts of process work that truly helped during this semester, and I am going to take a variety of different aspects and put them into work moving forward. Completing the project in sections for example is extremely helpful, and something that I began in this class that did not always maintain consistency, but is something that needs work for the future. Overall, I have learned the most about my process as a writer, and have grown to be open to change and growth and self-analyzation after the work from this semester.
My writing process throughout the semester has undergone true trial by fire due to the projects that took place during this semester. I have grown in almost all areas of my process, and even if I have not grown I have become more self-aware of myself as a writer. My character as a writer has changed because I am able to critically analyze my own work at a much higher level, rather than remaining satisfied with the basic and bare minimum for any work that I produce. I have begun to grow and become a much stronger and a more capable writer due to my own work ethic throughout the projects. I did every single assignment that was asked of me this semester and always made time for this class and the goals that I needed to accomplish in order to complete the projects in a timely manner.
There are other aspects that I have struggled with due to the amount of work going on all at once in this semester, specifically my ability to manage time. There are simply not enough hours in the day for everything that needs to be completed, and my ability to manage time has been effectively challenged because of this. However my newfound ability from this class to work through large projects in smaller segments is something that I am going to take moving forward. For example, during this class I was able to complete the work for the projects in different blog posts, which I could bring together into the one big project. I find this very helpful to my writing process. Taking larger projects that take weeks to complete and self-assigning due dates for parts of the project will make completion of projects far easier, especially with the busy life of college remaining a constant issue. Overall, I have learned the most about my process as a writer, and have grown to be open to change and growth and self-analyzation after the work from this semester.
Selection from Rough Cut
My writing process throughout the semester has undergone true trial by fire due to the projects that took place during this semester. I have grown in almost all areas of my process, and even if I have not grown I have become more self-aware of myself as a writer. My character as a writer has changed as I have become more self-aware and I have become able to critically analyze my own work at a much higher level, rather than remaining satisfied with the basic and bare minimum for any work that I produce. I have begun to grow and become a much stronger and a more capable writer due to my own work ethic throughout the projects. I did every single assignment that was asked of me this semester and always made time for this class and the goals that I needed to accomplish in order to complete the projects in a timely manner. There are other aspects that I have struggled with due to the amount of work going on all at once in this semester, however this is something that I am going to take moving forward. There are certain amounts of process work that truly helped during this semester, and I am going to take a variety of different aspects and put them into work moving forward. Completing the project in sections for example is extremely helpful, and something that I began in this class that did not always maintain consistency, but is something that needs work for the future. Overall, I have learned the most about my process as a writer, and have grown to be open to change and growth and self-analyzation after the work from this semester.
Re-edited Selection
My writing process throughout the semester has undergone true trial by fire due to the projects that took place during this semester. I have grown in almost all areas of my process, and even if I have not grown I have become more self-aware of myself as a writer. My character as a writer has changed because I am able to critically analyze my own work at a much higher level, rather than remaining satisfied with the basic and bare minimum for any work that I produce. I have begun to grow and become a much stronger and a more capable writer due to my own work ethic throughout the projects. I did every single assignment that was asked of me this semester and always made time for this class and the goals that I needed to accomplish in order to complete the projects in a timely manner.
There are other aspects that I have struggled with due to the amount of work going on all at once in this semester, specifically my ability to manage time. There are simply not enough hours in the day for everything that needs to be completed, and my ability to manage time has been effectively challenged because of this. However my newfound ability from this class to work through large projects in smaller segments is something that I am going to take moving forward. For example, during this class I was able to complete the work for the projects in different blog posts, which I could bring together into the one big project. I find this very helpful to my writing process. Taking larger projects that take weeks to complete and self-assigning due dates for parts of the project will make completion of projects far easier, especially with the busy life of college remaining a constant issue. Overall, I have learned the most about my process as a writer, and have grown to be open to change and growth and self-analyzation after the work from this semester.
The content of my re-edited selection of my conclusion is far more streamlined and separated out in order to ensure that thoughts flow from one idea to the next. In the previous conclusion, I am trying to address a lot of information in a single paragraph. I believe that introducing different ideas, specifically how much I have learned and grown from the process work completed truly shows a completion of what I was trying to do in my thesis statement. I believe that the characteristics of the assignment were much better addressed, and I believe the my writing process was always the main focus of the entire assignment.
The form of my re-edited selection also changed as well. I broke up the original conclusion into multiple paragraphs after going through peer review, and I believe that it allows my paper to flow more as my ideas are addressed solely through each paragraph and I am not trying to do too much within a single paragraph. I believe that it allows for the conclusion of my paper to take more time to fully elaborate on all of the ideas that need to be fully expressed within my paper, rather than shoehorning in too many ideas and not taking enough time to fully explain everything I want to do.
Editorial Report 1
In this blog post, I am going to compare a section from my rough draft to my final draft.
Selection from Rough Cut
Throughout this semester, my ability to plan, manage time, adapt to unfamiliar situations, learn new technology, and revise were put to the test over the course of the first three projects in this class.
Re-edited Selection
Throughout this semester, due to my work on the projects and the process work it entailed, I have grown as a writer in some areas and realized my faults and flaws in others as well.
This is how my thesis has evolved from my rough cut to my final cut. I believe that I refocused the content in the re-edited selection as opposed to the selection from the rough cut. I believe that the original thesis was too wordy of a thesis, and that the thesis statement therefore was trying to be overly specific and not allowing my paper to grow. In the re-edited selection I decided that the main focus should be the projects and the work that I learned from completing them, rather than how I changed in specific areas during random points throughout the semester in working on the projects. I believe that my new thesis allows the paper to grow and allows for much more flow rather than the original.
I believe that the form of the thesis generally remains the same, however I tried to ensure that the thesis was not too complicated to understand. Originally I had a lot of topics that I listed out that I would try to cover, while in the new thesis I am going to focus on the projects and what each project taught me about my own writing process. I believe this final version leads to a more a logical progression that my paper can now follow.
Selection from Rough Cut
Throughout this semester, my ability to plan, manage time, adapt to unfamiliar situations, learn new technology, and revise were put to the test over the course of the first three projects in this class.
Re-edited Selection
Throughout this semester, due to my work on the projects and the process work it entailed, I have grown as a writer in some areas and realized my faults and flaws in others as well.
This is how my thesis has evolved from my rough cut to my final cut. I believe that I refocused the content in the re-edited selection as opposed to the selection from the rough cut. I believe that the original thesis was too wordy of a thesis, and that the thesis statement therefore was trying to be overly specific and not allowing my paper to grow. In the re-edited selection I decided that the main focus should be the projects and the work that I learned from completing them, rather than how I changed in specific areas during random points throughout the semester in working on the projects. I believe that my new thesis allows the paper to grow and allows for much more flow rather than the original.
I believe that the form of the thesis generally remains the same, however I tried to ensure that the thesis was not too complicated to understand. Originally I had a lot of topics that I listed out that I would try to cover, while in the new thesis I am going to focus on the projects and what each project taught me about my own writing process. I believe this final version leads to a more a logical progression that my paper can now follow.
Tuesday, May 3, 2016
Open Post to Peer Reviewers
In this blog post, I am going to leave an open post to peer reviewers for my rough draft.
The link to the rough cut of my project can be read here. At the point I am posting this, my rough draft is still being written and going through the revision process, and therefore the project is by no means perfect whatsoever. I am very much unsure about the content of my project, and would definitely appreciate during the peer review process for the peer reviewers to focus on the content of my project as much as possible.
Some major issues are that this project has not truly gone through any editing, especially with everything happening at the end of the year and the stress that everyone is going through in regards to finals. There has been a lot that has happened this week that has ensured this project has not gotten the attention it should. I am posting this early so if anyone is doing this, it can be taken care of completely and people can go through and tear the rough draft's content apart.
I believe that for the first time in this class, I am more worried about my content rather than my form. The form for this standard college essay is very good at this point, and if the peer reviewer happens to see something, if possible remind me however it is more likely that I am just focusing on the ideas at the moment because I believe myself to be rather secure in the form of the project.
The link to the rough cut of my project can be read here. At the point I am posting this, my rough draft is still being written and going through the revision process, and therefore the project is by no means perfect whatsoever. I am very much unsure about the content of my project, and would definitely appreciate during the peer review process for the peer reviewers to focus on the content of my project as much as possible.
Some major issues are that this project has not truly gone through any editing, especially with everything happening at the end of the year and the stress that everyone is going through in regards to finals. There has been a lot that has happened this week that has ensured this project has not gotten the attention it should. I am posting this early so if anyone is doing this, it can be taken care of completely and people can go through and tear the rough draft's content apart.
I believe that for the first time in this class, I am more worried about my content rather than my form. The form for this standard college essay is very good at this point, and if the peer reviewer happens to see something, if possible remind me however it is more likely that I am just focusing on the ideas at the moment because I believe myself to be rather secure in the form of the project.
Saturday, April 30, 2016
Peer Review for Jason Boley
In this blog post, I will go over my peer review for Jason Boley.
I reviewed Jason Boley's content outline, which can be seen here. For Jason's content outline, I made a brainstorming suggestion, where I told him that I believe the audience would lose focus over the course of the beginning of the video as he goes over information that the audience is already aware of, the details of what the projects were. I believe I helped him because I understand where Jason is coming from by going over the projects, however we all know the details and his attempt to get the audience's attention would only lose them.
I based this off of the video essays that we watched in class, and how repetition of the obvious made the video essay drag on extensively for a longer period than was necessary. Also the discussion in class, where the idea that going over the details of the project was not necessary as we all know what the projects are. I admired the way that they structured their video essay, it gave the project a very logical sense of direction and progress, which is extremely nice for this final reflection.
I reviewed Jason Boley's content outline, which can be seen here. For Jason's content outline, I made a brainstorming suggestion, where I told him that I believe the audience would lose focus over the course of the beginning of the video as he goes over information that the audience is already aware of, the details of what the projects were. I believe I helped him because I understand where Jason is coming from by going over the projects, however we all know the details and his attempt to get the audience's attention would only lose them.
I based this off of the video essays that we watched in class, and how repetition of the obvious made the video essay drag on extensively for a longer period than was necessary. Also the discussion in class, where the idea that going over the details of the project was not necessary as we all know what the projects are. I admired the way that they structured their video essay, it gave the project a very logical sense of direction and progress, which is extremely nice for this final reflection.
Final Production Report 2
In this blog post, I am going to compare another segment of my outline to a segment of my rough final project.
Outline Item
I also revised this project extremely heavily, as I started out this project trying to balance sexism and racism within the comic book industry, and I cut out the racism aspect which got rid of an entire other argument with evidence that I had laid out. This scares me still, however I believe that despite whatever grade I get the project benefited from my revisions.
Adaptation of Outline Item
Only towards the very end of the writing process did I notice that there was a glaring problem with my project. In fact the revision date only took place the week of August 24th, the week that the project was due ("Tim Wils - English"). The project was being produced with too broad of a concept, and I realized that I had made the mistake of not seriously going over my plans during the brainstorming phase. I had immediately gone with one of the first ideas that had come to mind, and while the idea was overall a good one for me it was too broad of an argument. I had to make the choice to entirely remove and portion of my project, in order for the project to become streamlined and focused on the ideas that I believed were most important to me as an individual. I had never before taken a project so late into it's process and edited the project so heavily, especially with the due date drawing closer. This ability to look at my work critically and see a flaw in the project, and understand that revision is necessary at such a large scale is a drastic improvement on my writing process. While there is fear in regards to this issue, as such a heavy revision so late might have taken away importance from my project, I believe that editing my own work is something that I learned how to do at a far greater level thanks to my work on Project 3.
I decided that while citations should not take a major place on my work in this paper, I believe that when possible it is good for the project to introduce citations at some point. While they are not all important, it does establish the genre conventions in a very strong way, and I believe that it also helps give the paper alone a better feel of credibility. I also tried to elaborate further and use the correct tone to try and establish credibility, while also keeping within the requirements of the assignment as well.
The production of this raw material was completely fine. I remember Project 3 extremely well as it was the most recent project, and the segment discussed here is something that I still currently am nervous about as well. The revision process during this project was extensive, and I am still nervous that I may have cut out too much of my project. These feelings that I discussed here have not changed since that point in time, and I write with the same intention as I did at the time it occurred.
Outline Item
I also revised this project extremely heavily, as I started out this project trying to balance sexism and racism within the comic book industry, and I cut out the racism aspect which got rid of an entire other argument with evidence that I had laid out. This scares me still, however I believe that despite whatever grade I get the project benefited from my revisions.
Adaptation of Outline Item
Only towards the very end of the writing process did I notice that there was a glaring problem with my project. In fact the revision date only took place the week of August 24th, the week that the project was due ("Tim Wils - English"). The project was being produced with too broad of a concept, and I realized that I had made the mistake of not seriously going over my plans during the brainstorming phase. I had immediately gone with one of the first ideas that had come to mind, and while the idea was overall a good one for me it was too broad of an argument. I had to make the choice to entirely remove and portion of my project, in order for the project to become streamlined and focused on the ideas that I believed were most important to me as an individual. I had never before taken a project so late into it's process and edited the project so heavily, especially with the due date drawing closer. This ability to look at my work critically and see a flaw in the project, and understand that revision is necessary at such a large scale is a drastic improvement on my writing process. While there is fear in regards to this issue, as such a heavy revision so late might have taken away importance from my project, I believe that editing my own work is something that I learned how to do at a far greater level thanks to my work on Project 3.
I decided that while citations should not take a major place on my work in this paper, I believe that when possible it is good for the project to introduce citations at some point. While they are not all important, it does establish the genre conventions in a very strong way, and I believe that it also helps give the paper alone a better feel of credibility. I also tried to elaborate further and use the correct tone to try and establish credibility, while also keeping within the requirements of the assignment as well.
The production of this raw material was completely fine. I remember Project 3 extremely well as it was the most recent project, and the segment discussed here is something that I still currently am nervous about as well. The revision process during this project was extensive, and I am still nervous that I may have cut out too much of my project. These feelings that I discussed here have not changed since that point in time, and I write with the same intention as I did at the time it occurred.
Final Production Report 1
In this blog post, I am going to compare the outline to the rough cut of my final project.
Outline Item
Planning out the rest of the semester was an extremely daunting task to complete, and I was unsure if I was going to be able to complete it effectively. This was my first encounter with time management in this class, and it was the most serious and long term planning that I truly encountered in college, especially with most of this semester being a sort of pick my own poison sort of mentality.
Adaptation of Outline Item
Time management was an aspect of my writing process that I found immensely inefficient coming into this class. From the very beginning, I was unsure of myself when faced with the decision on which genres should I assign myself for the rest of this semester. I had only written essays before, and the other genres were very unfamiliar to me at the time. I decided that it would be prudent of me to save the essay for the final project, as essays come more natural. I had known that with finals and the audition into the BFA Acting program at the end of the semester, I thought it best to leave the most familiar genre for that time frame as a gift of sorts for the end of the semester. However, forcing myself to work in unfamiliar genres very early was a difficult decision, and made this course a terrifying prospect moving forward. I was unsure of myself and my own abilities, and I immediately began to lower my expectations for a high grade in this class. Not due to my lack of will power or determination to try, but because of the automatic assumption that my best writing would not be good enough.
I decided that form would be most important here in that I would try and strike the right tone of a college essay, while also trying to complete the topic of the project in self-reflection of my character and growth as a writer from this semester. I tried to explain myself in a way that gave myself credibility with more thorough and expressive word choice, and I believe that this is the best way that my essay is going to show credibility, rather than the citations or sources that I am using as those sources are going to be all coming from me.
The production of this raw material is very easy to produce, as I remember very distinctly these emotions and memories from the beginning of the semester. There are no hiccups as I remember what I am going to be discussing in my essay quite clearly, as it only happened a few months prior and the stress or happiness that came from these moments is very easy to recall in my mind.
Outline Item
Planning out the rest of the semester was an extremely daunting task to complete, and I was unsure if I was going to be able to complete it effectively. This was my first encounter with time management in this class, and it was the most serious and long term planning that I truly encountered in college, especially with most of this semester being a sort of pick my own poison sort of mentality.
Adaptation of Outline Item
Time management was an aspect of my writing process that I found immensely inefficient coming into this class. From the very beginning, I was unsure of myself when faced with the decision on which genres should I assign myself for the rest of this semester. I had only written essays before, and the other genres were very unfamiliar to me at the time. I decided that it would be prudent of me to save the essay for the final project, as essays come more natural. I had known that with finals and the audition into the BFA Acting program at the end of the semester, I thought it best to leave the most familiar genre for that time frame as a gift of sorts for the end of the semester. However, forcing myself to work in unfamiliar genres very early was a difficult decision, and made this course a terrifying prospect moving forward. I was unsure of myself and my own abilities, and I immediately began to lower my expectations for a high grade in this class. Not due to my lack of will power or determination to try, but because of the automatic assumption that my best writing would not be good enough.
I decided that form would be most important here in that I would try and strike the right tone of a college essay, while also trying to complete the topic of the project in self-reflection of my character and growth as a writer from this semester. I tried to explain myself in a way that gave myself credibility with more thorough and expressive word choice, and I believe that this is the best way that my essay is going to show credibility, rather than the citations or sources that I am using as those sources are going to be all coming from me.
The production of this raw material is very easy to produce, as I remember very distinctly these emotions and memories from the beginning of the semester. There are no hiccups as I remember what I am going to be discussing in my essay quite clearly, as it only happened a few months prior and the stress or happiness that came from these moments is very easy to recall in my mind.
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